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Title: Trichomania by cheekybeak
Rated: Teen [ - ]
Summary: Glorfindel has a very delicate problem and only Elladan can help him with it.....but can he?
And just what is Elrohir up to?
Category: Fiction
Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Erestor, Glorfindel, Legolas
Content: Humor, Mystery
Challenge: None
Series: For Years to Come.
Chapters: 7 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 13637 | Read count: 3319

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Published: February 20, 2015 | Updated: March 10, 2015


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 26, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Omg, I hope this isn't going to turn out like my dad! Everyone kept telling him he was crazy; he had a head full of hair that would never die...And now, guess what happened! Glorfindel without his hair...how awful. *shudders*



Author's Response: Hello! Fancy seeing you here!! Poor old Glorfindel...can you imagine him bald? This was the first story I ever wrote...literally....and so it is not that good, well I reread it recently and I can see where it needs improving, if I wrote it again now it would,be so much better....so I apologise for that...the writing does get better....promise.



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 27, 2016 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I want a LEGOLAS bracelet!! ahem... sorry...

Aaah... I’ll be snickering about that for awhile. And I know just how the thing goes, a hindsight view on writing. Even a couple weeks later, it goes “Augh! I wrote this crap? Well, we’re just going to have to fix this…”

Well admittedly, your writing is better now than then, but I thought this was hilarious anyway!! I bet the ol’ muse had a good laugh when this sent out;)



Author's Response: Gosh I would like a Legolas bracelet too! Naughty Elrohir, he is incorigable. Glad you managed to survive the writing....the next story in the series is better .....in fact I think that one is my favourite. One day I may go back and re edit this one but a part of me likes the idea of leaving it not quite as good so I can see how far I have come!



Title: Culture Shock by cheekybeak
Rated: Teen [ - ]
Summary: The sequel to Trichomania. Glorfindel, Elladan and a very confused Wood Elf......FINISHED!
Category: Fiction
Characters: Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Erestor, Glorfindel, Legolas
Content: None
Challenge: None
Series: For Years to Come.
Chapters: 13 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 28645 | Read count: 5908

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Published: March 17, 2015 | Updated: April 18, 2015


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 31, 2016 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Elrond with a 'plumbing for dummies' book! Oh, that's funny.



Author's Response: Poor Elrond. Plumbing is his weakness. He does find it fascinating, but sadly for him the rest of Imladris does not! What he needs is someone else who shares his interest, poor darling :)



Title: Friendship Amidst Loss by KimicThranduilion
Rated: Teen [ - ]
Summary: When Legolas and his troop become targets for slave traders tragedy strikes and the Prince suffers a devastating loss after a series of savage attacks. Longstanding rivals put feuds to bed, old friendships stand strong and new ones are forged but can friends reconciled, old and new help Legolas in the aftermath?

Disclaimer: I own nothing besides my OCs.
Category: Fiction
Characters: Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Legolas, OFC, OMC, Orc, Thranduil
Content: Angst, Hurt/Comfort
Challenge: None
Series: Tales of Friendship
Chapters: 17 | Completed: No | Word count: 48813 | Read count: 8091

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Published: December 27, 2015 | Updated: June 05, 2016


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: June 05, 2016 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

Well, hopefully Aldred will take better care of Legolas! He may only do it for profit, but at least poor Legolas won't be beaten as often:(

I've noticed your writing style is very direct, very powerful! I like it. The only thing I can say that would make this  easier to read though, would be shortening any run-on sentences that pop up. If you're working in a Word Document, the grammar check will take care of it. If not , it's really easy just to read through and add a period or semi-colon where a complete thought ends, and where a new one starts up.

I've really enjoyed your story so far! The dialogue is real and the paragraph breaks effective, easy on the eyes. I'm looking forward to next installment. Have an awesome day!-)



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 20, 2016 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

Augh! What is wrong with you! Do you ENJOY torturing elves?! *Sniff-sob*
I'm telling you, if you don't give Legolas something nice, I'll not have the will to read more... *sniff*
I think that if Legolas did face this kind of humiliation and pain though, he would react just this way. Nice doing, that.
Oh, and I'm not saying that you're this cruel or anything...but please, please don't make the gray-eyed ranger/brutal monster Aragorn? There is no way in heaven or hell that he would be so cruel, even if he hated something... right? Good. *phew*
Anyways, awaiting next chapter.-)

Author's Response: HI Thanks for your review - I'ms orry for putting the elves through the wringer - I just cant seem to stop :) Sorry - I can't promise there will be no more pain in Legolas' immidiate future but I will allow him a little freedom soon so he can be our fierce elven prince again. :) And no worries Aragorn had not even been born as yet when this story is set. SO you can releax on that front. Next chapter will b up shortly - hope you enjoy and thanks for reading and reviewing.



Title: Lost In Translation by cheekybeak
Rated: General Audiences [ - ]
Summary: While waiting in Imladris after the Council of Elrond Legolas has a confusing encounter with one enraged Dwarf. Just what has he done to upset him? Why is it all he has to show for his generosity is a pile of broken arrows? Aragorn's first attempt at improving communication between Dwarf and Elf.
Category: Fiction
Characters: Aragorn, Gimli, Legolas
Content: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 6 | Completed: No | Word count: 12621 | Read count: 2341

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Published: April 03, 2016 | Updated: May 29, 2016


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 29, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, I loved this so much. 'Everyone will see my regal good manners'...poor Legolas! I gather you're not following the movie version of Legolas and Aragorn's prior friendship? Well, we have five more chapters to read and find out. Beautiful job!



Author's Response: Oh yeah, poor little Legolas. He got things so badly wrong with Gimli at the beginning! You will know by now that yes, I don't follow the movie version of Aragorn/Legolas. Instead I have them getting to know each other as the quest goes on...glad you liked this !



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 29, 2016 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

This was so sweet. Legolas is such a light, such a brilliant fighter. He needs to know it, and Gimli's the one to do it! Beautiful short, and great story as always.)



Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it. Yes Legolas has a bit of a self esteem problem here. He is well aware the Noldor think him less than they are.....and remember this is the same Legolas who is in Darkness in Your Heart and we know there he feels inadequate and that he doesn't live up to his dead big brother. Some of that inadequacy shows through here I think?



Title: In the Hall of the Elvenking by ziggy
Rated: General Audiences [ - ]
Summary:

Something has stirred in the Wood. There is conflict and unease in the Thranduil's stronghold and he suspects something to do with Thorin Oakenshield. Bilbo in the Halls of the Elvenking, a Ring and a sword. Warning: slash - bound to be at some point. Sex certainly

(The Desolation of Smaug and BoTFA from the Wood-elves pov.) Warning: slash in later chapters. Violence.

 

The story of There and Back Again from the Woodelves’ perspective. 

 

For Spiced Wine, Cheekybeak and Naledi. Thank you for keeping me going. Sorry- this is not quite in the Sons of Thunder arc exactly, but very much in that vein - I just miss writing Elrohir and Legolas!!

 

 

 

Note: This follows Black Arrow although it does not require you to have read that in order to enjoy this. Suffice to say that Thranduil struck a bargain with Smaug in order to retrieve the black arrow that he then gives to Bard’s ancestor. In this way it is passed down to Bard so he can kill Smaug. Smaug demands that Thranduil send someone to renew the bargain every ten years. It is that time. The warriors who go to Erebor to pledge peace are called the Danedh-Amlung, Dragon’s Ransom.


Category: Fiction
Characters: Legolas
Content: Action/Adventure
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 | Completed: No | Word count: 17646 | Read count: 2558

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Published: April 16, 2016 | Updated: June 02, 2016


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 28, 2016 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Bilbo Baggins

Good ol' Anglach! He's climbing to Legolas' and Bilbo's like-level! Gotta love him.

I think he's probably a little young though, few hundred years maybe? I hope he doesn't lose his flare for loving little creatures with age. I still love the animosity between the dwarves and the rest of the woodelves, though.

So how far you think you're going with this? To the end of PJ's movies? That'd be great. I really hope you flesh out Legolas a little better than PJ did at the end, if that's where you're going.) Anyways, great chapter! Have a great day.-)



Author's Response:

Yes- my intention is to do the whole of the BOTFA - to correct PJ's terrible rendering of Thranduil mainly! And because I missed Legolas so much in my last story- unfortunately I am missing Elrohir now and really want to write him into it but my beta is adamant I should keep him on ice for the next fic.

 

I love Anglach too-feel guilty every time I write him for having him as one of Smeagol's guards at the start of More Dangerous. I only started writing him in Black Arrow and this and wish I had kept him alive.



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 07, 2016 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 Anglach's dwarf

I read all four chapters in a row! You're writing is so natural. I love it, and Anglach is hilarious. And Bilbo, a female dwarf...? lol

I was glad you had the dwarves' meeting with the elves as the book version. The movie...I don't know...Doesn't it just seem as though Peter Jackson (in the hobbit only, LOTR was perfect), made the elves out to be like battle-hungry warriors with no other thought but of their next kill? Legolas definitely, and it was such a shame because I love him so much! I really like how you showed them as having real personality, and genuine reasons for their actions!

The only thing I can say you could watch is repetive adverbs. It seems like you could have edited a sentence to sound better, and then forgot that the word was just used - For instance, 'There was an outraged cry from the assembled elves' and then the next sentence says that 'Legolas shouted with outrage.'

I only say it because the rest of your writing is so rich and flavorful. It really captures some of that 'Tolkien taste' without being too folksy or shakespeare butchering.

Keep up the good work! :)

Author's Response:

Thanks Arasa- I am trying to fit writing into a really busy life so sometimes miss things- it really helps if people give feedback, espeically when there is a lot of nice things as well:)

 

I am so pleased you like Anglach- I felt I owed him a life after doing him in before the start of More Dangerous. 

 

I love PJ's films but liek you, felt he had really done a disservice to Thranduil in particular and his Legolas is so one dimensional- just earnest and vicious really. They didn't do the emotion bit for him well and I htink PJ is more interested in dwarves and hobbits than elves- he didn't really do the Rivendell elves very well either I htink. So- my attempt to right the wrong done to some of my favourite characters. Glad you are enjoying it!

 



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: June 03, 2016 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 Rabbit Pie and serving wenches...or not.

Agh! No Legolas! *sighs* Well, I'm liking your Tauriel a little better than the movie (which is saying a lot, because I REALLY don't like her much). 'I have done nothing to give Legolas reason to pursue me. I have not encouraged him.' She's lived at east six hundred years with Legolas and no spark there, but along comes a dwarf and it's all loving hearts! *huff*

I liked Anglach in here though. I know he dies, but I'm beginning to wonder if begging you to change this univers from the other is going to work...xD Don't blame me for trying! You're the one who made me love him.

Certainly Fili and Kili, faces still pressed against the grill, noticed and were almost leering.He could see that they were nudging each other and jostling to be at the grille. ' Lol, loved this.



Author's Response:

I know!!! How can that be????? Still, in my fics Legolas is such a tart it doesn't matter. Yeah- Anglach. It's REALLY hard -might have ot write the scene Legolas finds him after the Orcs free Gollum just to give him more than a bit part - but I don't think I've got the heart to be honest.

 

Thak you for reviewing, Arasa17. Means a lot.



Title: The Council of Errors by cheekybeak
Rated: Teen [ - ]
Summary: When Elrond calls a council everybody comes, even Legolas. But why is he in hiding? Just what has he done? Sequel to Deep and Meaningful.
Category: Fiction
Characters: Aragorn, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Gimli, Glorfindel, Legolas
Content: None
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 | Completed: No | Word count: 3822 | Read count: 980

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Published: April 22, 2016 | Updated: May 23, 2016


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 25, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Legolas -*snicker* hiding *gasps* under the bed! What on earth is funnier than that?! I have no idea why, but for some reason, Legolas hissing at someone from cringing under the bed has killed me. I'm done for.

                     -reading on now-



Author's Response: Oh I am glad you found this. Yes, brave warrior Legolas hiding under the bed is a rather ridiculous image!! He can face a nazgul but not an angry Dunedain!!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 25, 2016 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Oh, poor Legolas. Believe it or not, I never thought of Legolas feeling guilty to Aragorn for letting Gollum get away. I love this; it's like it's all a big game. So funny. xD



Author's Response: It IS a big game! I write these crack fics when I want to blow off steam! This is the fourth one in a series of crazy stories about these guys....if you ever get bored and what something to fill in time...there may be a few "in"jokes referring back to the other stories but you should be able to enjoy this one ok without having read them. The others are Tricomania, Culture Shock, and Deep and Meaningful.....in that order!



Title: The Darkness in Your Heart by cheekybeak
Rated: Teen [ - ]
Summary: Legolas begins a new life in Ithilien but not all who go with him are eager and he brings with him pain that cannot be ignored.
Category: Fiction
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Elladan, Elrohir, Éowyn, Faramir, Gimli, Legolas, OFC
Content: Angst, Character Death, Het, Hurt/Comfort, Romance
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 15 | Completed: No | Word count: 31789 | Read count: 9591

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Published: May 04, 2016 | Updated: June 05, 2016


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: June 06, 2016 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Yes! Now that I think of it, Gimli might be just what he needs. Maewen's willingness to sacrifice for him now could be too. After all this time, pulling her head out of the sand could help him much more than just pretending everything's all right. I loved the last  end scene with Legolas in their rooms, btw. Maybe the next time Maewen gets so angry with him, she can remember him like that.(

Anyways you're spoiling me with all these updates! I almost didn't notice this new chapter out 'cause i thought it was on the 'recent list' for the last chapter. My Monday is a better place! 

 



Author's Response: Gimli will cut through all the crap! He is very forthright and to the point. A good choice I think. And yes, Maewen needs to get over herself, stop hiding away from things she doesn't want to hear and face up to some of Legolas' experiences. You are right, she does need to remember Legolas' vulnerablity at the times when he is being unreasonable. Next chapter is a few days away...so hopefully you won't miss it!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 20, 2016 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Ah, great chapter. I cringed when Aragorn said Legolas was 'unfit to protect his son'...ouch. And I love your depiction of Eldarion. It's exactly the way I imagined the brief view of him in the movie.

I agree with curiouswombat...hee, funny name... It would be a little inappropriate for her to talk to Aragorn, being human, king, and in all his grandliness, but Arwen is a fellow woman! She could talk to her.

It is up to YOU to make this right! :D can't wait.

Author's Response: Well Aragorn meant Legolas was physically unfit to protect Eldarion...and he was right and Legolas knew it...and he would never put Eldarion at risk. Yes, Maewen talking to Aragorn would,be all kinds of bad. Legolas would feel betrayed I think...but Arwen...yes thats a different story. Up to me to make it right?? But I love angst so....oh dear!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 17, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Augh! T-taenor...? *sniff* I've only been reading about him for three minutes and you've killed him already! Ah, you're cruel indeed, woman. This was so real...-sniff- I'm reading on.

Author's Response: Ha,ha, yeah...sorry about that. Someone had to die so I could torment Legolas and Taenor drew the short straw...he was nice too...it was a shame :( Thanks for the review!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 17, 2016 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I read every single chapter straight through! I don't know why, but when Legolas said 'Longer than you have been alive I think, Aragorn.'...I almost laughed myself out of the chair. Oh god...I can just picture it!
Everyone always semes to forget how much older Legolas really is. He doesn't act it, of course, but think how hard it must be for Estel to grow up and live around beings so much older, and Legolas never to feel at all superior to him for it.
Anyways, awesome story. I love it. This only cements my belief that 'Legolas' and 'romance' can be used in the same sentence without becoming a Mary Sue! Besides, I'm sure we all love him enough to forgive it anyway.
Okay then, next chapter anytime you're ready!-)

Author's Response: Thank you! This review made my day. The thing I was most frightened of when I started writing this story was that it would turn out to be one of those cliched horrid romance stories that I hate reading! So good to hear you thought it wasnt one of those!! Yeah and Legolas and Aragorns ages....mostly I try not to think about it because if you do it can really give you a headache!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 26, 2016 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

Oh boy... the angst! We lull you into a false sense of security, bring the sunshine and the bunnies out, and then wham, it hits! You have this special kind of flare for making things terrible... It's great! I have a nice pile of shred hankies lying twisted up here.)

Oh, things were bad enough when Legolas felt so guilty about Taenor's death, but now? Feeling insecure and inadequate too...? That could realistically lead him to breaking up with Maewen, because he feels too guilty for burdening her and dragging her down. The whole 'it's not you, it's me' thing...but I'm sitting confident that this is gonna turn out right... *cringes hopefully*

If I was Maewen, I would shake him, set him down with Thranduil for a good talking-to, slap him(gently), then kiss him...multiple times... and take him for an extended vacation. Where's the fun in that though, right? xD We don't get chapters of story!

 



Author's Response: Oh gosh a flair for making things terrible......I guess that's good?! Legolas does feel inadequate, you are right...and it is a long neglected ongoing issue for him. I don't think he has ever felt right as a leader. Always comparing himself to his brother and finding himself lacking. It does add to Legolas and Maewens problems. But, at the moment at least he seems quite dependant on her for his happiness......which is not a good thing either!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: June 05, 2016 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14

Whoa two chapters, yah! Oh Yes yes, call Thranduil. I'm just waiting to see what you do with him.

These guys are so dysfunctional though! Well, it keeps the relationship alive. You really can't go from slaughter and orc guts to cushion-knitting. The only trouble is, i think these scars Legolas carries will never fully heal. He's too sensitive and has too much heart to push past this so easily. It's a key element that a lot of fanfic writers seem to forget actually, either that or jam the opposite down your throat. I get this perfect blend of warrior pride and Legolas complexity. He's hurting too much. Anyway, especially good chapters! Great job:D

 

...I loved the ships circling in the night metaphor, btw.)



Author's Response: They are dysfunctional that's for sure and you are right...re Orc guts and cushion knitting...(love that mental picture!) and think about just how long these elves have been involved with the Orc guts! Like centuries!! I think a lot of them probably struggled to adapt to peace time. You are right, can Legolas actually heal? I am not a fan of happy, happy, endings. My angsty stories rarely have them...usually they have a "well things are a bit better if we don't look too closely" ending. Even the one story I wrote in Valinor...(The Other Side of The Sea) was all about how Valinor turned out not to be the happy ever after place they thought and they discovered they had to do some serious work to heal themselves there! So anyway...will Legolas end this story perfect and whole? No he won't. (There is only one person with a hope of fully healing Legolas and that's his brother....and his brother ain't here) Will he and Maewen end up together in the worlds most perfect relationship...no they won't...they may still be together, haven't decided that yet, but things won't be perfect. Life's not like that!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 24, 2016 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Ah...a fresh breeze of fluff. I love it. Up until now, Maewen and Legolas' relationship has been kind of squeezed into things. It hasn't had a chance to show itself and stand alone. This has been what it's missing!

Geez, how do you get these chapters out so fast? Do you have them pre-written and only waiting for your beta's send back? Oh, well. I'll take what I can get.-)



Author's Response: Yes, lovely mushy fluff. The calm before the storm...because believe me the storm is coming. They are kind of gorgeous together but the angst gets in the way. I am off work with a back injury atm so lots of writing time to stop me going stir crazy...plus yes...I am a bit ahead of myself!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 24, 2016 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Aagh! You love the angst, don't you?! You love seeing just how terrible you can make it and then...bam! end of chapter. *sighs* Well, keeps me reading, anyway.

I think Legolas' hopeless kind of grief would only last for a time, like this, before turning to anger. Both grief and sadness tend to have that affect, and since he's feeling so guilty, he's trying to ease the burden. Aragorn just happens to be the closest prospect. - sniff - At least he isn't turning it on Maewen...yet.

The only thing that I think is a little unlikely here, is that an elf, an elf prince especially, would bed a lover with his people's knowledge for centuries without marrying her. You know, up until about sixty years ago, any kind of messing around was considered an absolute 'scandal'. Elves usually did marry for life.

'Course now, you get to keep us on the edge this way! *wicked cackles* Anything goes wrong and they can break up!)



Author's Response: Ah! but I havent actually said they are not married....or the Silvan equivalent! I know I have written it so the assumption is they arent....but they might well be. As Legolas say to Aragorn, he has loved her longer than Aragorn has loved Arwen. So He is drawing a comparison between Maewen and Aragorn's "marriage" with Arwen. I take the attitude that LACE, (Laws and customs of the eldar) mainly refers to the Noldor...not the Sindar so much and definately not the Silvans. My Legolas is half Sindar/ half Silvan...and his personality tends more to the silvan side. I Think their "marriage" may have been looser and less formal and Tolkien does talk about elves marriages as being a simple as running away and sleeping together rather than a formal ceremony. So more a bond than anything. That is where I see Legolas and Maewen. A deep bond and commitment, that his people all know about. His people in Ithilien definitely veiw him and Maewen as a "married" couple. (As she said, she is expected to take on some of his commitments—such as seeing the family of a fallen warrior— if he is unable to.) But they can break up...oh yes, yes they can......even the Noldor can break up.....remember Feanor and Nerdanel! So glad you are enjoying this!



Title: Enough: So Beautiful the Lungs Are Breathless by UnnamedElement
Rated: Teen [ - ]
Summary: Things are dark in Mirkwood, and the death of the Elvenking's eldest daughter Lieutenant Felavel sends the family into a despairing spiral. This is the story of what it took to break their mother's steady Silvan heart, and it culminates in a criminal act of betrayal that may not be forgiven. It creates a seed of doubt in Thranduil's youngest son, and a fear that he is not enough to control his own mind... / Third Age 1872 / A Legolas back-story.
Category: Fiction
Characters: Legolas, OFC, OMC, Thranduil
Content: Angst, Drama, Gen
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 | Completed: No | Word count: 23097 | Read count: 1775

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Published: May 05, 2016 | Updated: June 04, 2016


Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 14, 2016 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two

Oh my gosh, your writing is so beautiful, so vibrant! I can see and hear everything that's going on. To me, that's all a writer can ask for, draw in the reader until the world you create is just as real as the one we live in. Sorry for cutting this short...but there's another chapter!
- rubs hands with greedy eyes -

Author's Response: Hello again, Arasa! Thank you again for taking the time to review. I am so pleased to hear the words paint a picture for you--I work very hard at that so this feedback is very meaningful to me. Thank you for letting me know you are enjoying this story!!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 14, 2016 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Oh, this was so perfect and so sad. Ithildim and Saida are such good friends to Legolas. One of the things I thought Peter Jackson did well in the Hobbit was the the kind of old, deep sadness associated with Legolas' mother's passing. This has captured it on such a closer, more in-depth level. Great work!

Author's Response: Hello, Arasa! I am so glad you are enjoying Ithildim and Saida. They are two of my very favorite characters--OC or otherwise!--to write. After reading this comment, I went to y.o.u.t.u.b.e and watched the scenes you were referencing in PJ's Hobbit series, and I was touched you felt I evoked that same strain of sadness. I hope I can give some life and understanding and dimension to my interpretation of a family's 'multivariate' loss in this story. Thank you again for taking the time to review!!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 05, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

I haven't read your other works, so I'm not quite sure what's going on yet, but you're an excellent writer. Is this going to be a full-fledged story, or is this a brief recap of past events, providing a history for later works? Either way, keep up the good work! :)

Author's Response: Hello, Arasa17! Thank you very much for taking the time to review, and for the kind comment on my writing. :) My stories generally range between 3,000 to 25,000 words, and "Enough" will be on the upper limits of that. So in answer to your question: this is a "full-fledged story" for me, but also definitely a history for things yet to come. This is actually only the second published story of a much larger series (all mostly unfinished and unedited...) that takes place in Mirkwood prior to the War of the Ring. Thanks again for the encouragement! Look forward to hearing from you in the future.



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 24, 2016 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Ooh... It's so sad when there's nothing between doing what you need to do and what others want you to do, except guilt and uncertainty. This's captured it so well!

I think his mother is past the point of no return, making this so hard on him...:( With Arda soon to fall into darkness, I don't think she could ever truly heal without sailing. I just thought it was so awful how Legolas and even Thranduil were terribly affected by his mother's fall. Although in PJ's version, he said that she died...so...? Think you're planning to go with that? Personally, I like the idea of her sailing better than dying, obviously.D

The analogy to the kite's anchor, I loved, by the way. It just really pulls you into the story when everything Legolas does is shown: folding his hands, fidgeting. It's a perfect window into what he's feeling, describing what he does. Great job.

Oh yeah...my PC says that this chapter was posted tomorrow, so I'm just going to go with I was given a special pre-viewing of the chapter. Don't mind me. It's midnight and I should be in bed. Have a great day and keep up the good work!



Author's Response: I am very glad you caught onto that guilt as you described in your first paragraph; that was the point of this chapter and I was quite worried it come across right! Thanks for the compliment on description. I really enjoy writing images. :) And, to be honest, I was.... Not a huge fan of PJ's Hobbit interpretation (there were brilliant and breathtaking moments, to be sure! And I understand that a lot of people do love it, and I respect that). That being said... my Mirkwood backstory, therefore, is completely separate from the movie-verse.... I do appreciate the emotions PJ capitalized on in the Mirkwood family--they were a very real interpretation of loss and grief in a family unit, I think, especially in wartime. Those emotions are reflected in this story, because grief is such a universal human experience, as well as loss and trauma. As to whether Gwaerain dies or sails, you will have to wait and see! I wouldn't want to spoil that yet. As always, I so appreciate you taking the time to review, Arasa! Your words are always kind and encouraging. And, yes, we will pretend you have gotten a glimpse into the future! Though I more suspect, maybe, we are just in different time zones, Perhaps. I truly don't know! Have a lovely day, as well!



Reviewer: Arasa17 Signed
Date: May 15, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One

Hey, great chapter. This is what could help Legolas heal, moving on and getting back into nature, taking up patrol agaain. It's where he belongs!
But I was just wondering, did I miss something, or haven't you told us yet what Legolas's necklace/pendant signifies? See, I'm working on a book where the main character has a leaf pendant that was from his dead mother...? Is that the case, like a present from his mother before his sister died?
Anyways, waiting for the next installment! -no pressure-)

Author's Response: Hello, Arasa! I am glad you enjoyed this chapter! Chapter 5 is now up. :) No, you did not miss anything--it has not yet been explained, and will not be for a while. All you need to know right now is that it is important, because Legolas does not yet know exactly what it means to him either. ;) Thanks for taking the time to review, Arasa!