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Penname: cheekybeak [Contact]
Real name: Bob
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My Stories are arranged in Three Series.

In Ages Past: Which deals with the story Erestor, Glorfindel, and Maglor in the First and Second Age

Order of Reading:
A Song for My Beloved
The Maedhros Incident
Because He Killed Fingon
Stranger from a Strange Land

And

For Years to Come:

Legolas, Elrohir, Elladan, and Glorfindel with a little bit of Erestor, in the Third and Fourth Ages

Trichomania
Culture Shock
Deep and Meaningful
The Last Time
Bitter Loving
The Coronation


Then the Walls of Glass Series, (sad serious angsty ones!)

Walls of Glass
Walk Beside Me
That Wondrous Song
The Ties that Bind Us.

All three Series are interconnected but it is not necessary to read the earlier one to enjoy the second or third.

The Other Side of the Sea
And
The Darkness of Your Heart
Are stand alone stories written in different universes.

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Title: ~ A Trinity Of Princes ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [ - ]
Summary:

Glorfindel and Legolas talk to Finrod, Glorfindel's elder brother, in Valinor before the Noldor sail to their new haven in the east of Middle-earth.

This was a birthday gift-fic for Esteliel. It can be read after The Second Return: Chapter Two of Magnificat of the Damned ~ Book One..


Category: Fiction
Characters: Finrod, Glorfindel, Legolas, OMC, Thranduil
Content: Erotica, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its own Light.
Chapters: 2 | Completed: No | Word count: 11612 | Read count: 13856

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Published: July 01, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011


Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: March 10, 2015 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ And Of Gold ~

This came up as a random story and I am so glad it did!
I have been hanging out for something of how Legolas and Glorfindel get together and here it is......it was beautiful. I find these two very intriguing.

I have just started reading Magnificat II and am loving it, all the potential for political intrigue. The tension between Glorfindel and Feanor over Legolas....I wonder how that will develop.....I hope Feanor doesn't get his hands on Legolas, I know he is irresistible but Legolas is somehow different. I am hoping if Feanor turns his mind to possessing him he can withstand it. Time will tell,

And I was missing someone amongst your reborn elves. I was just thinking of leaving a review yesterday asking " Where is Finrod?" .....and here he is, it did seem strange he hadn't come back with the others but now I see why, issues with Celegorm and Curufin. I hope he finds a way to travel there soon though. I like him, Glorfindel needs him I think and tension between him and the Feanorians would be interesting to read!!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you, Cheekybeak :) Yes, I remember writing this and putting in more about Legolas and Glorfindel because there was not much written when I wrote this.

And I was missing someone amongst your reborn elves. I was just thinking of leaving a review yesterday asking " Where is Finrod?" .....and here he is, it did seem strange he hadn't come back with the others but now I see why, issues with Celegorm and Curufin

Well, I hope you will like it when he does come on the scene, because yes, he does. I don't know where you are up to yet, but it's definitely on the horizon :)



Title: ~ Magnificat of the Damned Book I: Starfall. ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [ - ]
Summary:

Tears unnumbered they would shed, yet still they would live, and love and defy Darkness.
And they would die. Yet as Fëanor prophesied, their deeds would “be the matter of song until the last days of Arda.

The Arc of Fire, the blazing thread of forbidden love and desire which began with Fëanor and Fingolfin spanned three generations and thousands of years.
I Will Lead And Thou Shalt Follow. told of the birth of that passion. This story continues the Arc, telling of the ultimately doomed love between Fingon and Maedhros, Fingon's son Gil-galad and Tindómion, son of Maglor, in an Arda where the love of one's own gender was seen as an offense in the eyes of the the Valar – and punished by banishment into the Everlasting Dark.

“I, Tindómion Maglorion do so swear, sire.” His voice shook a little. “My fealty and all my service is thine, Gil-galad of House Fingolfin. From now until the day of my death.”

“Or mine,” said Gil-galad, quite softly.


Book One of the Arc of Fire, and set within the Dark Prince AU, this story also includes Vanimórë, son of Sauron, parts of his earlier life, and the forging of the bond between himself and the Elves which would last for eternity.


Category: Fiction
Characters: Aredhel, Caranthir, Ecthelion, Elrond, Erestor, Fingolfin, Fingon, Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Gothmog, Maglor, Melkor/Morgoth, OFC, OMC, Orc, Sauron
Content: Angst, AU, Character Death, Drama, Erotica, Incest, Rape/Non-con, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Magnificat Of The Damned
Chapters: 49 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 177761 | Read count: 144514

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Published: July 01, 2011 | Updated: July 04, 2011


Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 17, 2015 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 ~ City Of Legend ~

Ah so Glorfindel still bears some scars from his rape by Feanor, although he seems very conflicted by it. He does not love Feanor and yet he is almost entranced by him.
His desire not to be possessed by anyone seems like a deep subconscious barrier he maybe doesn't even understand fully himself.
I wonder if he gets over this before he gooks up with Legolas or is Legolas just happy being the submissive one ? I am looking forward to see how those two actually ended up
Together .

Author's Response: Yes, Fëanor lit Glorfindel's fire, but it did leave some scorch marks. There was, however, more to it than non-consensual sex. Glorfindel did want him, and was enthralled by him. I do think the experience made him want to be dominant, but maybe that was his actual nature, and Fëanor just made him realise it.

I think Glorfindel does *think* he gets some-one happy enough to play the sub to him, but it's a bit more complicated than that, because Legolas comes from a people who have no laws forced on them about sex.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 17, 2015 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 ~ The First Shadows ~

I have never understood how Aredhel ever ended up in Gondolin in the first place. It seems just a situation she would never have agreed to going to. Trapped in a city!

Author's Response: I think the same. It was the worse place for her really, but probably deemed to be the safest.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 18, 2015 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 ~ Duplicity Of Love ~

It is so interesting that Maglor and Fingolfin have this desire between them because they each are seeing Fëanor in the other.

I love Maglor In This, he is quite different from the Maglor I read about in Dark Prince I think, must gentler somehow. I guess a lifetime of pain changed him.
It is great to see Caranthir written so sympathetically, usually he is written as being quite one dimensional...the angry uncontrollable and unlikeable brother but you have captured his fierce temper and short fuse but still given him empathy and made him softer somehow. I really really like it.

Poor Fingon stuck married to Rosriel. She is a nightmare. Surely Fingolfin could have found him a better wife than that!!

Author's Response: It is so interesting that Maglor and Fingolfin have this desire between them because they each are seeing Fëanor in the other.

Yes, it was *something* anyway, with Fëanor gone, and those Finwëions - always drawn together like a magnet to metal.

I love Maglor In This, he is quite different from the Maglor I read about in Dark Prince I think, must gentler somehow. I guess a lifetime of pain changed him

Yes, he was alone for thousands of years, half or sometimes wholly mad. It is not surprising that he changed. :(

It is great to see Caranthir written so sympathetically, usually he is written as being quite one dimensional...the angry uncontrollable and unlikeable brother but you have captured his fierce temper and short fuse but still given him empathy and made him softer somehow. I really really like it.

I don't think an angry, uncontrollable person would have been able to rule Thargelion/Dor Caranthir nor become so wealthy had he been all temper and a short fuse - not that he wasn't like that, but that cannot have been all there was to him.

Poor Fingon stuck married to Rosriel. She is a nightmare. Surely Fingolfin could have found him a better wife than that!!

Fingolfin will always rue that he chose her, but he didn't know what she was like, then, that she had an agenda, and whom he married didn't matter to Fingon, who didn't want any woman at all.

Thank you for the reviews, Cheekybeak - what a nice surprise to come online to!



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 18, 2015 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 ~ Ereinion ~

Gil Galad of course HAD to be Fingon's child and he is SO adorable!
But oh the interesting mess it would have been had he ended up being Maglors or Caranthir's......

Author's Response: It would have been a mess if one of them had sired him. It never occurred to me, though, because I have always seen him as Fingon's. And something good had to come out of that horrible marriage.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 18, 2015 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ~ That Moonless Night In Winter ~

Ah . So sad. But you know, I think ever since he found out Fëanor was dead Fingolfin has had no wish to be alive without him. This has been a long time coming for him. Such a shame the Valar will prevent them being reunited in death, for a good long while anyway.

Author's Response: This has been a long time coming for him.

I think so, yes :( It broke my heart to write of his death :(



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 18, 2015 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 ~ Union And Reunion ~

This was so painful to read, because I know. I know what is coming for these two. So very sad.

Poor, poor Maedhros.

Author's Response: I did not like writing it, Cheekybeak :( The only think that kept me going was knowing that I was going to being them back eventually!



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: March 06, 2015 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49 ~ The Beginning Of Night And The End Of The Light ~

I have finished this in a rush and didn't have time to review as I went so if you don't mind I will do it all in one, here.
I remember you told me when I was reading dark prince that this death scene was sadder here....and you were right, it was...although to be honest I don't think it was the writing but rather that I had been reading about Gil Galad and Tindomion for so long......(and being completely utterly frustrated with them) and so I was more invested in them, I KNEW them and knew their story so yes it was so totally SAD.
And my anger at Manwë knows no bounds. I am livid, furious, outraged....I run out of adjectives to describe it I am so angry!!
THIS IS SO UNFAIR!!!!!!
Gil Galad in no way deserved this. Nor did Tindomion.

On a slightly different note, loved Glorfindel and Vanimórë, a whole lot of different underlying issues with each of them regarding needs for domination, and subjugation going on there and it was fascinating.....( and hot!)

Erestor is driving me crazy. I think there is something going on with him behind the scenes that I don't know? I can't understand why I felt so completely betrayed by him being this slightly dodgy, or at times openly dodgy, character. Erestor is not a character I usually care about at all. Mostly I find him two boring to bother with.
(There are only two Erestors I have read that I love and that is Ziggy's totally to die for Erestor who is amazing.....and Encarion's lovely one.....).so I just don't know why I am getting so upset with him here!!!!

Now I have one question....whereabouts do I find Glorfindel and Legolas's story?
Oh....I guess it is two questions because I want to find out what's going down with Erestor too.....

Author's Response: Thank you, Cheekybeak, for finishing. :

I was so sad, writing Gil-galad's death - not sure I would have been able to do it had I not already known I was going to bring the dead Noldor back, but that was still a whole Age of grief for Tindómion.

On a slightly different note, loved Glorfindel and Vanimórë, a whole lot of different underlying issues with each of them regarding needs for domination, and subjugation going on there and it was fascinating.....( and hot!)

Yes there is, but in the future they'll both be 'gods' so they kind of have to be able to work together if necessary; and now at least they know one another.

Erestor is - well, to be honest I am not interested in him at all. I like some other Erestor's. but not enough to want to write him myself or look up stories that he's in. (If he had been mentioned just once in the Silmarillion as being a great warrior or lord I would have been totally different, but in my mind, any-one important was mentioned there, so if he's not, it's because he was not that important.

All that is going on with him is that he was raised from a teen by Rosriel and became indoctrinated by her, but later he regrets it and changes. I do write something of him in Magnificat II, but to be honest, I only added him because there used to be a reader who was a big fan of his years ago, and so I added him for her, really. But although he's in earlier parts of Magnificat II, he fades out of the story just because I can't bring myself to care about him.

There are flashbacks to Glorfindel and Legolas' first meeting in Magnificat II, although I can't remember what chapters offhand, but the first third of the story, I think.

Again, thank you very much for reading and commenting :)



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 10, 2015 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ A Victory And A Warning ~

Loving this....it is amazing, the only thing I am sad about is that Fëanor was dead before the story began!

Maedhros and Finon are my favourites and you wrote the rescue beautifully.

Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: I have always been so angry that Fëanor died so soon, followed throughout the SIlm by the others, so of course I had to bring them all back. :) Thank you for going on to this story :)



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 19, 2015 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 ~ Leaves Before The Wind ~

I knew you would write this so it was heartbreakingly terrible.... And you did. Oh Gil Galad. I just kept thinking of that sweet little boy who hero worshiped his father.

But Maedhros.......... His raw and heartfelt grief. It is so .......I can't even find the words to describe it. He is breaking my heart.
Amazing writing !

Author's Response: This was such a heart-ache to write, so I am glad it comes across. :( There was no other way to write such a tragedy.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 25, 2015 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 ~ Doom Wears Many Faces ~

It is so sad to read Maedhros like this. Breaks my heart. It is so far from the Maedhros he ought to be, was meant to be.

But you know, even in the real not Fanfiction Silm this happened too. Who knows what was actually in Tolkien's head when he wrote it but his Maedhros does completely change after Fingon's death. Before that he was honourable, the reasonable brother who held the others back, the one who maintained connections with the rest of the Noldor. After....well he ran off killing other elves and committing atrocities......why Tolkien why? It can only have been because of Fingon. Nothing else makes sense. I think so anyway!!

Author's Response: I am pretty sure Tolkien had seen such a thing happen to otherwise honorable people when he fought in WWI. I think Maedhros, and all his brothers suffered PTSD - it was called 'shell shock' back in WWI, although it's now become clear that warriors suffered it in ancient times, too.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 25, 2015 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 ~ A Storm Of Shadows ~

Oh no, Maedhros cannot even get comfort from Gil Galad. How tragic for both of them. I understand how Gil Galad's similarity would confront him with what he had lost and he, ( or Maglor) feels he could not cope with that but maybe it might have helped? Somehow if he could have poured time and energy into Fingon's son, what was left of Fingon. It may have helped him.

Author's Response: Yes, I think then that he was beyond help, to be honest :(



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 25, 2015 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 ~ Begotten In Blood ~

I don't understand Elwing. I really don't. I have a small son and I cannot imagine leaving him for anything! I admit I judge her and find her seriously lacking, even though Tolkien obviously wanted us to see her as a heroine.

I confess I don't understand the silmarils at all. I have been unable to get my head round them. I know Yavanna hallowed them but to me they feel evil. It is like they magnify all the darkness in the souls of those who desire them. They entrap people and make them act as they would not normaly. The Feanorians have the excuse of the oath perhaps corrupting them but so many others who were not Feanorian were tainted by the silmarils.

It is as if the moment Morgoth killed Finwe so he could take them They became something bad/ wrong and destroyed lives. Actually even before that it is hard to tell if it is Morgoth's lies or the Silmarils that are causing jealousy and paranoia in Fëanor.

I somehow have to find an explanation for them that sits easily in my mind. I haven't got there yet!

Author's Response: I sort of understand her; the Silmarils seem addictive, so that any-one who gets their hands on them cannot let them go. Not that I agree with what she did, but the Silmarils did have that effect on those who owned them.

In this 'verse, the Silmarils contain part of Fëanor's soul; every artist, writer, musician, any-one who creates does put their soul into their work, and this is what Fëanor did, although without meaning to. Their brilliance was his soul, burning, and just as he could be intensely charismatic, so were the Silmarils. This was why he said his heart would break and he would die if they were broken. The Valar lusted after them, as Melkor did, but because none of them could possess and control Fëanor - having the Silmarils would be like possessing a part of him. But the Silmarils rejected the Valar, just as Fëanor did, and so Yavannah's 'hallowing' them was an attempt to make them accept the Valar (which they never truly did). I think that when they burned Melkor it was Fëanor's spirit that rejected him, but when they burned Maedhros and Maglor, it was because of the 'hallowing' - the Valar never wanted Fëanor's sons to have them. Again, in this 'verse, the Valar augmented Lúthien's power when she went into Angband to steal a Silmaril because she wasn't Fëanorion, and foresight showed them that Elwing would eventually come to Valinor. But even if they did not burn others, they did affect them mentally: Thingol, the dwarves who killed him, and Elwing.

Of course Fëanor's sons wanted to reclaim them not only because they were oath-bound, but because it would be like having at least part of their father back :(



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 25, 2015 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 ~ Descent Into Darkness ~

This was truly awful to read...Maedhros dying. I mean the writing was great....the emotion was awful. I understand how Maedhros has reached his bitter end. He was broken long ago but still I find a part of me is angry at him. Angry at him for taking that way out and leaving Maglor. So unfair.

Author's Response: Both Maglor and Maedhros thought, I believe, that when the Silmarils burned them, it was actually their father rejecting them. Fëanor does explain in Magnificat II that it was Yavanna's 'meddling', trying to hallow them, that caused this.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 26, 2015 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 ~ My Fealty And All My Service ~

Erestor is a baddie?!!

Author's Response: I wouldn't say he was a baddie exactly, but at this point he has been too long under Rosriel's influence, but don't worry, later he makes a complete turn around, although we hear more about it in Magnificat II.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 26, 2015 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 ~ The Truths Of Love ~

Gil Galad needs to get control of his horrid, horrid mother! I understand why he does not have it, because of his age when he was sent away, the lack of his father etc but he is no child now and needs to take charge I think. Easier said than done of course.
It is so sad thinking he has spent all this time hearing hateful things about his father. There is nothing hurts a child more than someone disparaging their parent.....worse that it is a dead parent and that Gil Galad loved him so deeply.

Author's Response: He wouldn't have believed anything any-one said of his father; he knew Fingon, if for too short a time. :( The trouble is here, is that it's not just Rosriel, it is an entire faction of people, and all of them nobles, who believe what she does - and the trouble with that? What they believe is actually true, although we don't know that until Glorfindel returns and even then he won't say that the dead have been banished to the Void.
Gil-galad is noble, so he would not treat his mother as she treats him, but neither does she influence what he thinks, as we shall she.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: February 26, 2015 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 ~ Silver Light ~

I am struggling with this, it hard to read because it is all so sad. Gil Galad's childhood. Fingon and Maedhros...

I can't get out of my mind what I know the Valar did to Gil Galad in the end. All his mother's poison came back to punish him....I felt it unfair when I read it in Dark Prince and now I "know" him better it is SO much worse!
How could they?! ...so angry at the Valar!

One question? Basel says Gil Galad " needs" Tindomion because of his lost father, the bereavements he suffered in His youth and the abuse,( because it was abuse) he suffered from his mother.

Is he attracted to Tindomion solely because of that, just because he looks like Maglor and Gil Galad wants to recapture something of his memories of happiness with his Father and Maedhros. If that is then only reason it would make me sad because I want Tindomion to be wanted because of himself not because of his parentage and similarity to his father.vhope that makes some sense....

Author's Response: Are you as furious at the Valar as I was writing this? If so, I quite understand! That's the thing: they can threaten, but unfortunately they can also make good on that.

Is he attracted to Tindomion solely because of that, just because he looks like Maglor and Gil Galad wants to recapture something of his memories of happiness with his Father and Maedhros. If that is then only reason it would make me sad because I want Tindomion to be wanted because of himself not because of his parentage and similarity to his father.vhope that makes some sense....

Well, there is this thread of fire that has run between the House of Fëanor and Fingolfin since those two, through Maedhros and Fingon, and now to Gil-galad and Tindómion. Of course Gil-galad needs some-one close to him, but no it is not just that. I did write of their meeting, of course in this story, but I expanded upon it a little showing Gil-galad's POV in Fear and Fealty. in Fragments of Fate and Fire.



Title: The Sons of Thunder by ziggy
Rated: Mature [ - ]
Summary:

The Sons of Thunder meet a storm in the son of Thranduil, one of violence and desire. Warning for this chapter. Explicit sex and undercurrent of violence


Category: Fiction
Characters: Legolas
Content: Slash
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 46 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 315298 | Read count: 112985

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Published: July 02, 2011 | Updated: January 20, 2013


Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 03, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This has nothing to do with new, secretly influenced by evil Elrohir but I love your Gimli. I love everything about him here, his embarrassment at thought of what Grim and Grimmer think he and Legolas are up to in the shadows, his loyalty and defence of Legolas, his resentment of the way Aragorn has shifted his attention to his brothers and the rangers and somewhat neglects his friends,( that always struck me in the book) he is just wonderful!

I have one question. When did Legolas lose a drinking contest, and dance wildly round a fire with his enemies? I rather fancy seeing him do that with Elrohir!

Author's Response:

Yes- I love Gimli too. This is actually one of my all time favouite chapters ,that and Rohan's Gold Gimli in the bath house being prudish with Aragorn and Legolas naked.

Oh- Gimli just makes it up to try and point score. It's partly a reference to the film in Helm's Deep and partly to Songs of Rohan - Legolas only ever pretends ot get drunk but perhaps Ill write one in the sequel, just for you:) Yes- there's a nice scene in that - maybe not Elrohir though... I can see some good plots developing from that.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 03, 2015 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Now this felt really different, in a great way!

Elrohir thinks his strange dreams are because of his human side...and maybe it is still partly that but now it feels like he is slowly being possessed in a way. The manipulation of the memory Angmar placed there is creeping out of his mind to assail him. It completely changes how I feel about him and also feels really really threatening and an omen of BAD things to come. Like he is losing some kind of battle within with the evil that has been done to him and eventually it will consume him, the dreams are just the start.
And he is oblivious to it

It all works incredibly well with the new knowledge of the damage Angmar has done to him.

And only Elladan's sweet goodness can calm him.

Oh it all fits so well!

Author's Response:

Ooh- I hadn't thought of that! I mean he is losing the battle but I wasn't aware of that when I started writing this.. I have to go back and re-read it, saee all the faults in it but I am busy writing the next chapter of Glass and hten have a new Hobbit based fic on from Black Arrow ,to put right the wrongs done to Thranduil by PJ!!



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

This story, and Elrohir especially have been transformed for me! You have no idea how much I hated in Elrohir during this scene when I first read it .he was such an arse. But now he feels more like someone with honour.... I never really thought Elrohir behaves with any honour, especially here but now, it felt like a real struggle within him and he is losing it but he is trying SO hard. Angmar of course will succeed because Elrohir doesn't even know what was done to him.
And Aragorn and Elladan are so confused, they know something is wrong but not what and they can't understand, though Elladan traces the change back to their mother not to the run in with Angmar.

And I love how Elladan, who Elrohir tried to save and so who was unwittingly the catalyst for this evil twisting of his brother is the only one who can cancel it out with his presence .

I am feeling so so very sad for Elrohir. A complete transformation of my feelings.

Author's Response:

Yes!!! Successs!! It did really influence me when you told me how much you disliked him and could not trust him with our beautiful elf. So it made me think how I was portraying him - too harsh and unsympathetic perhaps? But on theother hand, I really like his uncompromising nature - he punishes himself so badly for his wrongs- at the end he is willingly taking the Black Web from legolas, knowing he will die and still you didn't like him!!!

 

But there is no excuse for this scene- ever. I did not like him at all myself when I wrote this- had really mixed feelings about him actually. I thought Legolas would endup with Elladan but oh, he insisted Elrohir was so much more exciting!! Slutty elf.

 

Of course Elladan is half way to wraith-hood when Angmar does htis so he wouldn't know I suppose - but perhaps he felt something had changed. Might get that in somewhere sometime. Thanks to you my dear I have all these ideas:)



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Just have to say, Legolas's reaction to Aragorn telling him he failed in his trust and his anger about those words at the council of Elrond is so much more powerful now I know exactly who Legolas lost there in that defence of Gollum. Poor. Poor Legolas, My heart aches for his loss of Anglach , Aragorn has no clue what he has said!

I am unhappy with Aragorn in this chapter!



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I am sure I have told you for me this is the worst thing Elrohir did in the entire story, this sexual assault on the unknowing Legolas.it is worse even than the betrayal to the nazgul because at least that was a bizarre attempt at doing the right thing and this was a terrible personal invasion.
I was very interested to see if it read any differently knowing what Angmar has done to Elrohir.
The answer is it did. You describe Elrohir almost as a split personality here, watching himself care for Legolas in a detached way while a part of him wants to cause pain, and then at the end being completely surprised at what he had done, wondering how that had happened. It is certainly as if he is being torn apart. As if whatever Angmar has done is taking control at times and when it does he is a completely different person.

I still hope eventually in the sequel you address this incident which lies unspoken and unacknowledged between them.

I just wanted to cry out to Elrohir.. " you didn't do it! You didn't do what it is you think you did!!"

Author's Response:

Yes. Agreed. Awaful and so wrong. No excuse. I replied to this bit in my previous reply- I didn't like him when I wrote this either.

Yes- it will be acknowledged, eventaully- but it gives some leverage, some darker complexity to Elrohir even when he has seen the truth about how he feels about Legolas. It's what Legolas feels that i don't know.

 

I am so glad to have your analysis and feedback - good to know it still works. Thank you.



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

I am with Gimli on this. Aragorn behaved badly. I get why.....but still......

The first time I read this I desperately wanted Elladan to get with Legolas, even though I knew it wasn't going to happen. Now that I know magnificent, if slightly unstable, Erestor is waiting for him in the wings I am not so keen on the idea of Legolas after all.

Author's Response:

Yes- me too. I thought it would be Elladan but as you say, magnificant and flawed. Elrohir is rather more Legolas' taste. And Erestor is so sweet with Elladan- so humble and patient. What do you think will happen when he finds out about Imrahil?



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

What does Erestor feel when he finds out about Imrahil?

He will be devastated.

I have to admit I am not looking forward to that because I think it will be heartbreaking.
I don't think Erestor has seen his love for Elladan as ever being anything but unreciprocated which is sad in itself, and I don't think he can really imagine a situation where they would be "together" but still even if he is resigned to that there is still that little bit of hope....that "what if?" And Imrahil would crush that hope out of him.....sob.....

Even worse though is that Imrahil is mortal so Erestor would have to face losing Elladan to mortality. I don't think he has contemplated that happening, Elladan is so elvish you would put money on the fact he would be the twin who wouldn't choose Men.

Of course what Erestor doesn't know...yet anyway is that Elladan loves him too. But even Elladan doesn't know that!

Author's Response:

Cheekybeak- you are exactly right!! It will be devastating but he will bear it in quiet dignity and love becasue Erestor's love for Elladan is very pure actually- and deep. He will grieve but want Elladan's happiness- but you are right that it will be terrible for any of htem to think that Elladan might choose the way of men and all this time it's been Elrohir who was struggling with that. 

 



Reviewer: cheekybeak Signed
Date: June 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Ah, Legolas and Elladan, so beautiful and sadly not to be. You cruelly teased me with this scene first time around!

I wonder though.....Legolas is so gifted with the song, can he not feel something has been distorted within Elrohir? Would Angmars spell be able to be heard as a discordance, a wrong note within the song?

Author's Response:

I know- teased myself. That's a good point- I'll look at that again and have a think.

Thank you for all these fab comments and helpful pointers.